This is the eighth instalment of Weekend Writing Warriors’
8 Sentence Sunday Blog Hop
Last week’s excerpt from my short story, “Mommy! Make it Stop!” brought forth some helpful critiques and I did a little editing.
Read the revised snippet HERE.
Clarification points: (Apologies! I should have specified on the first post.) This story takes place in the early 1960s and is told by an adult, present-day, third person narrator and not the main character child, who is about 7 or 8 years old. She’s a forlorn little girl, forced to grow up too fast, because of her toxic environment.
She knew it would be hours yet, before either one of her parents got up. Staring at the TV, but, not really seeing, all she could think about was how depressing the rest of the day was going to be.
Mother, tearfully complaining about her lot in life and what an awful man she was married to. Father, severely hung over and barely uttering a word, then slinking off to watch the football game.
The little girl so longed for a “normal” life, where parents adored each other and their children, as depicted in sitcoms of the day, like “Leave it to Beaver”. She would have given anything to have parents like that!
This was a rough road for an only child; no siblings to commiserate with, to gain strength from, to share the pain. The little girl was all alone.
Read the entire story HERE.
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