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Today I’m posting an excerpt from a new short story, “The Visitation”.
Have you ever had a memory that haunted you for life?…

Afraid to look at the car, yet consumed by a morbid curiosity, her eyes swept over the smashed body and peered inside. Bloodied glass everywhere. His blood! The news broke that very day. After lingering in hospital for several hours, he succumbed to his injuries. A night of drunken carousing and life was over at age 21. How fortunate for her they had parted ways the month before. She could well have been a passenger in that vehicle of death! Ironically, she was just learning to drive. It affected her state mind and fuelled a burning need to see the wreckage.


wrecked car
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Debbie D.
Canine Innkeeper in suburban Toronto, Canada, known as "The Doglady". Writer/website owner, photographer, animal lover, music fanatic, inveterate traveller. History, literature and cinema buff. Eternal "hippie/rockchick". Binational, German/Canadian and multilingual. Looking for the next adventure!
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23 thoughts on “#8Sunday WEEKEND WRITING WARRIORS, MAR. 2/14

  1. Hi there! Stopping by to welcome you to the A to Z challenge! Also, in case you plan on having a theme this year, check out the A to Z Theme Reveal Blogfest! You can sign up for it on the link under my name.
    #TeamDamyanti minion

    1. Thank you Tarkabarka and welcome to The Den. 🙂 I’ve already signed on to the Theme Reveal Blogfest, through Vidya. My link is #110. Thanks so much for visiting and apologies for the tardy reply. Cheers!

  2. I can totally understand why she needs to see the wrecked car for herself. Very intense snippet, I was feeling the emotion for sure – great writing.

    1. Hi Veronica; Yes, I think viewing the car was necessary to quell her disbelief that he was actually dead. One’s first brush with death is bound to be traumatic. So glad you liked this and thank you for commenting. Have a good week. 🙂

  3. Definitely a gruesome sight – I think her relief at not being in the car may be lessened a great deal by memory of the sight and bad dreams. Certainly calls back memories of car accidents to everyone’s memories. Nicely done 8.

    1. Hi Susan; I’d say the horrible experience definitely overrode any feelings of initial relief. Glad you enjoyed this and thank you for commenting.

  4. Wow. She’s a lucky girl. Haven’t we all looked back at the past and been thankful that we’ve dodged a bullet? One of my former boyfriends would have been a disaster if we’d stayed together. Whew.

    1. Hi Sue Ann; Not sure I follow you. The entire story is set in 1971 and she went to look at the car the same day the driver died. Anyway, thanks for visiting and have a good week. 🙂

  5. Oh my this is very intense. I can imagine how she’d be feeling, a bit drawn to the wreckage. I can understand her feelings of relief, like she’d dodged a bullet. Looking forward to more Debbie : )

    1. Hi Millie; Glad you enjoyed it and yes, I’ll continue on with the story next time. Thanks for visiting and have a good week. 🙂

  6. Oh my goodness, eerie and dramatic. After seeing the photos of the car actor Paul Walker died in in California, this is particularly strong for me. Hope to see more from this next time.

    1. Hi Marcia; Glad you liked it! 🙂 Yes, I’ll continue with it next time. Thanks for reading and commenting. Have a good week. I too was shocked about what’s going on with the Sabres.

  7. Oh what a horrible sight! I’m glad she wasn’t in that car. I think we all have memories that haunt us, and this one is no exception! The pic is a very nice touch, too. Excellent 8!

  8. The first three sentences do a fantastic job of dropping the reader into deep third. You put us (readers) into her head. I’m not sure I’d pull back so quickly– by using “She had heard” in the fourth sentence. I don’t know about other readers, but I was enjoying the deep immersion. I think you might have a tiny verb tense shift in “ends”.

    I really like how you’ve started this! Please keep writing it! 🙂 Good 8!

  9. There needs to be a Weekend Food Photography Warrior Post, Debbie! ha, ha! 🙂 You, specifically, will REALLY like the current guest post on my blog, our friend… 🙂

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