#8Sunday WEEKEND WRITING WARRIORS, MAR. 2/14

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Today I’m posting an excerpt from a new short story, “The Visitation”. 
Have you ever had a memory that haunted you for life?…

Afraid to look at the car, yet consumed by a morbid curiosity, her eyes swept over the smashed body and peered inside.   Bloodied glass everywhere.  His blood!  The news broke that very day.   After lingering in hospital for several hours, he succumbed to his injuries.  A night of drunken carousing and life was over at age 21. How fortunate for her they had parted ways the month before. She could well have been a passenger in that vehicle of death!  Ironically, she was just learning to drive.  It affected her state mind and fuelled a burning need to see the wreckage.

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Debbie

Debbie

The “Doglady”. Canine Innkeeper in suburban Toronto, Canada. Writer/blogger, animal lover, music fanatic, inveterate traveller. History, literature & cinema buff. Eternal hippie/rockchick. Bi-national, German/Canadian and multilingual. Currently working on a memoir of the dogs she has known during her years as a pet sitter, along with other memoirs and creative writing pieces.

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23 Responses to #8Sunday WEEKEND WRITING WARRIORS, MAR. 2/14

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  2. Hi there! Stopping by to welcome you to the A to Z challenge! Also, in case you plan on having a theme this year, check out the A to Z Theme Reveal Blogfest! You can sign up for it on the link under my name.
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  3. Oh my! I’d be afraid to look at the wreck too.

  4. I can totally understand why she needs to see the wrecked car for herself. Very intense snippet, I was feeling the emotion for sure – great writing.
    Veronica Scott recently posted…Never Lose the Amulet PRIESTESS OF THE NILE for Weekend Writing WarriorsMy Profile

  5. Definitely a gruesome sight – I think her relief at not being in the car may be lessened a great deal by memory of the sight and bad dreams. Certainly calls back memories of car accidents to everyone’s memories. Nicely done 8.
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  6. Wow. She’s a lucky girl. Haven’t we all looked back at the past and been thankful that we’ve dodged a bullet? One of my former boyfriends would have been a disaster if we’d stayed together. Whew.
    Sandra Nachlinger recently posted…Weekend Writing Warriors #1My Profile

  7. Why not put the first three sentences in present tense? The rest is clearly farther in the past, and you need a tense shift
    Sue Ann Bowling recently posted…Weekend Writing Warriors: Tourist TrapMy Profile

  8. Oh my this is very intense. I can imagine how she’d be feeling, a bit drawn to the wreckage. I can understand her feelings of relief, like she’d dodged a bullet. Looking forward to more Debbie : )
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  9. Oh my goodness, eerie and dramatic. After seeing the photos of the car actor Paul Walker died in in California, this is particularly strong for me. Hope to see more from this next time.
    Marcia recently posted…Not a good day in BuffaloMy Profile

  10. Oh what a horrible sight! I’m glad she wasn’t in that car. I think we all have memories that haunt us, and this one is no exception! The pic is a very nice touch, too. Excellent 8!
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  11. The first three sentences do a fantastic job of dropping the reader into deep third. You put us (readers) into her head. I’m not sure I’d pull back so quickly– by using “She had heard” in the fourth sentence. I don’t know about other readers, but I was enjoying the deep immersion. I think you might have a tiny verb tense shift in “ends”.

    I really like how you’ve started this! Please keep writing it! :-) Good 8!

  12. Mike
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    There needs to be a Weekend Food Photography Warrior Post, Debbie! ha, ha! :) You, specifically, will REALLY like the current guest post on my blog, our friend… :)
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