#8Sunday WEEKEND WRITING WARRIORS JUL. 20/14

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This week, I’m returning to my Swiss boarding school memoir, “Internat Adventures”.  Previous instalment HERE.

Preamble –  My first year of high school was spent in a co-ed Swiss prison, er, boarding school, (there were actual bars on the windows!) which in German is called an “Internat” (short for International School). Last semester; Apr. – Jun., 1969:   Losing one’s first serious boyfriend to a bitter rival was such a heartbreak!  Said rival had previously injured me by shoving me from behind while I was changing a razor blade (this was before disposable razors).  The blade was driven bone-deep into my thumb, leaving a permanent scar.

The razor blade attack left me fearful and nervous.  I tried to stay as far away from Julie as possible, but she was always lurking somewhere. Soon, other people started giving me odd looks and my only remaining friends were room mates Jennifer and Vivian.

A two-week break for Easter holidays did nothing to ease the situation. First day back,  and there was Julie, locked in a hot embrace with Vaughan, outside the dining hall.  Even though I already knew he was lost to me, the tears flowed uncontrollably, as I ran around the corner and hid.

Later, in the dining hall, contemptuous glances from Julie’s table burned like fire.  What had I done to deserve this? 

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Julie had won!  Vaughan wouldn’t even speak to me and neither would his sister Judy, my former “best friend”.  This was a horrible turn of events for any 14-year-old to endure!

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Comments and helpful critiques always welcome.

Debbie

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P.S.  Interesting discussion today about “showing” vs “telling”.  Most of my writing is autobiographical, so I thought I’d just throw this in: DIFFERENCE BETWEEN FICTION AND MEMOIR

Debbie

The “Doglady”. Canine Innkeeper in suburban Toronto, Canada. Writer/blogger, animal lover, music fanatic, inveterate traveller. History, literature & cinema buff. Eternal hippie/rockchick. Bi-national, German/Canadian and multilingual. Currently working on a memoir of the dogs she has known during her years as a pet sitter, along with other memoirs and creative writing pieces.

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24 Responses to #8Sunday WEEKEND WRITING WARRIORS JUL. 20/14

  1. Yikes, she was attacked by a razor blade! I really felt for your character. It sucks being bullied and threatened with no support. Then, to find out the bully is being cozy with someone you really care about. I really loved this snippet. It made me feel very sorry for the character, and you were great with setting the emotional tone throughout the scene.

    Keep smiling,
    Yawatta
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  2. Gah, uberbitch for sure! Life can be so difficult when we’re young.
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  3. Wonder what kind of rumors Julie has started?
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  4. Teenage angst nut no less real, whatever age a person has to endure something like this. Very tense, at least there were two good friends left!
    Effective excerpt…
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  5. Fourteen year old girls can be the biggest witches!
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  6. Wow–you really captured it, Debbie, that feeling of being on the outside, and being the loser in the love competition! My heart aches for you. I was there, once, many years ago, too. But at least I had my home and my regular world to return to each evening after school. Great 8!
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  7. “The razor blade attack” caught my attention. Lots of conflict showing here. I thought it was a strong piece. Enough to forgive you for being a doglady and not a cat person like me? Maybe. ;)
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  8. Y’know, I’ve always loved the name Julie. I’ve never met a Julie I didn’t like…until this one. lol. You do a great job setting the tone and showing how even a look can cause so much pain and fear. Well done, Debbie! :)
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  9. I recall this and yet my heart breaks all over again. Girls can be cruel and in that awful environment, enemies are the worst. The razor episode needs a previous sentence to explain the horror and fear she’s left with. Excellent from the heart writing, my friend.
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    • Hi Charmaine; There’s a link to the previous instalment, which explains the razor blade incident, but I will expand the preamble as well. Hard to paint a clear picture with only 8 sentences. Thanks for your comments. I tried to recount the incidents and my own feelings at the time as honestly as possible.
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  10. oh man, 14 years old and the first heartbreak! Of course it seemed traumatic at the time! You capture that well.

    The first sentence, well, one option is to expand a bit and talk about how you couldn’t do certain things anymore that you used to like, especially if you thought Julie might be there, then readers would realize by themselves that you were fearful. Maybe mention that you couldn’t touch razors anymore.

    Still, a memoir is a little different than fiction. I think some flat-out telling is expected. I bet a lot of people would be interested in your memoir because I think it’s pretty different from what many of us went through. I always enjoy this excerpts, Debbie!
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    • Hi Marcia; Thanks for the suggestions. I’m soaking them all in and plan on self-publishing this memoir as a short story. It’s over 4000 words in total. As you said, these experiences are out of the ordinary and people have expressed interest. Glad you enjoy them as well. :)
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  11. I hate her already. What a jerk!

    I’d delete the first sentence because it is telling and you’ve shown a lot later in the passage.

    You did a great job showing teenage angst.
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    • Hi Joyce; Yes, Julie was a a total “Nasty Girl”. :) Not sure I understand why the first sentence should be deleted. It’s not a good thing to state my feelings at the time? I thought it was a good way to set the tone, no? Glad you enjoyed the rest and thanks for visiting.
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    LOL re: co-ed Swiss prison! Boo hiss…no love from Phoenix and I for Julie! :( Really good read, Debbie :)
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