This is the sixth instalment of Weekend Writing Warriors’
8 Sentence Sunday Blog Hop.
This is from a short story I wrote recently. Only 7 sentences today, to accommodate a natural break in the narrative. Starting from the top:
“Mommy! Make it stop!”
The little girl’s plea fell on deaf ears, as her parents continued to rage at each other, full volume. It was the same scene every weekend. Father came home stinking drunk and Mother railed at him. They said horrible things to each other and once, Mother hurled a heavy, glass ashtray at his head. It broke open a large gash on his temple and she took him to the hospital. The little girl was home alone and peace reigned at last, but only for awhile.
Read the entire story HERE.
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I don’t think that most of the adults who fight like that have any idea what an awful impact it has on the children.
Hi Clowie; No, they probably don’t, as they’re wrapped up in their own problems. Thanks for visiting!
Debbie Doglady recently posted…WORDLESS WEDNESDAY; MAR. 6 & THURSDAY FAVOURITE THINGS; MAR. 7/13
ooh, spooky. Reads like there’s a lot more going on; I get a sense that this excerpt is just an introduction to some even unhappier parts. Aw. Gotta feel for a kid going through that. Nice job
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Hi Marcia; Sorry for the late reply. Yes, there’s definitely more to come. Thanks for visiting.
Debbie Doglady recently posted…WORDLESS WEDNESDAY; MAR. 6 & THURSDAY FAVOURITE THINGS; MAR. 7/13
Yup, sounds very familiar.
Thanks for visiting, Jodi. No child should have to grow up that way but sadly, so many do.
Fortunately, some can overcome the disadvantage and become strong adults.
Debbie Doglady recently posted…WHAT IF…
That poor child!
Yes; a sad life for sure. What would the Cleavers have thought? Thanks for visiting, Kate.
Debbie Doglady recently posted…WHAT IF…
Omg, poor girl!! If that first sentence isn’t an opening hook, I don’t know what is! I HAD to read on to find out what was paining her so much. So sad, that it’s her own parents that are causing her such suffering…great 8.
AJ Bradley recently posted…Weekend Writing Warriors: Mar.10, 2013
Thanks for reading, AJ. Yes, sometimes life can be cruel, especially to children.
Debbie Doglady recently posted…WHAT IF…
How sad, but realistic in so many households l’m sure. The poor lamb.
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Thanks for visiting, Gemma. Yes; sadly, our society is full of dysfunctional families.
Debbie Doglady recently posted…WHAT IF…
Great snippet. You captured both her fear and relief in so few words.
Thanks! More to come, next time. Appreciate the visit. Have a great week.
Debbie Doglady recently posted…WHAT IF…
So sad. I don’t know what to do to save those children. They grow up to live what they’ve learned.
Good post, Deb.
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Yes, sadly, some do, but others have the strength to overcome. Thanks for reading, Teresa.
Debbie Doglady recently posted…WHAT IF…
Ouch. It says so much that the only time of peace is when Father is in the hospital.
Yes; a little respite from the drama. Sad how some children grow up. Thanks for visiting, Ute.
Debbie Doglady recently posted…WHAT IF…
How heartrending. Poor little baby. You captured her anguish perfectly.
Joyce Scarbrough recently posted…Tempers Cause Bad Decisions
Thank you, Joyce. Sadly, so many children come from dysfunctional families.
Debbie Doglady recently posted…WHAT IF…
I feel so bad for her. very intense and very well done.
Thank you so much! Sadly, so many children live messed up lives.
Debbie Doglady recently posted…WHAT IF…
Ouch! Very poignant.
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Thank you, Botanist.
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The poor baby. I feel so sorry for her.
She was not a happy little girl, for sure. Thanks for visiting, Elaine.
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Oh, that is so sad and so realistic. Great writing…
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Thank you so much, Ann. Yes, a very sad situation; especially for children.
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The sad part is that it can really happen.
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Yes, unfortunately, these things can and do happen. Thanks for visiting, Sue Ann.
Debbie Doglady recently posted…#8sunday WEEKEND WRITING WARRIORS; MAR. 10/13
There’s always an unseen victim. Poor baby.
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Yes, the kids are always the ones who suffer most. Thanks for visiting, Monica.
Debbie Doglady recently posted…#8sunday WEEKEND WRITING WARRIORS; MAR. 10/13
Wow, the little girl has MY sympathy immediately. An uncomfortable scene, very well done – terrific snippet!
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Glad you liked it, Veronica. Thanks for visiting.
Debbie Doglady recently posted…#8sunday WEEKEND WRITING WARRIORS; MAR. 10/13
Oh my lordy how sad. I have read two just plain heartwrenching snippets today, this one and the one from Ann Swann. It breaks my heart that the parents are so intent on fighting with one another that they have neglected the feelings of their precious daughter … you certainly invoke strong emotion! Wonderful snippet!
Thank you, Sara. Yes, they were so caught up in their own drama that the poor child was forgotten about. Glad you liked it and thanks for visiting.
Debbie Doglady recently posted…#8sunday WEEKEND WRITING WARRIORS; MAR. 10/13
I hope that I am putting this comment in the correct place. You write with such realism. How often, unfortunately, this occurs. The things which affect the lives of children growing up. How to put the recording of this out of your mind! It is so difficult. Can you get beyond it? A lot of people can’t and it repeats for generations. A few strong people do succeed. And what makes them so strong? idk
Hi Carol; Looks like your comment is in the right place. Yes, it’s sad how many children grow up in dysfunctional families, but, I do think that many of them have the strength to overcome their pasts. Unfortunately, as you said, others are doomed to repeat the cycle. Thanks for visiting! I will continue with this story at the next #8sunday.
Debbie Doglady recently posted…FOLLOW FRIDAY FOUR FILL-IN FUN; MAR. 15/13
Love that opening sentence!
Thanks for sharing.
~Summer
My 8 sentences
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Hi Summer; nice to meet you.
Glad you liked it. That first sentence does set the tone, yes? Thanks for visiting.
Debbie Doglady recently posted…#8sunday WEEKEND WRITING WARRIORS; MAR. 10/13
Debbie, you paint a vivid picture and then she’s alone in peace for a while. Shivers for what comes next.
charmaine gordon recently posted…3/10/13 WEWRIWA
Yes; the peace is temporary. Thanks for reading, Charmaine.
Debbie Doglady recently posted…#8sunday WEEKEND WRITING WARRIORS; MAR. 10/13
Wow that must of been a sight! And a bit scary at that…
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Yes; a scary time, for sure. Thanks for visiting, Linda.
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